2003-10-10

11:38 p.m.


His Boy

Read This Diary

CONTENT 10/70
You cut because you want to. If you didn't want to, you would stop. All of your reactions stem from choices you make. If you don't want to cut, stop. It's that simple. I'm sorry; this is all very trite and boring. This are entries I can find on 75% of what's in diaryland. It's all very moan-and-groan, oh I'm sad, I'm never happy, blah. Get happy. Break outside of yourself. You're wallowing in self-pity, and that's never going to get you anywhere. Try volunteering at a homeless shelter or something and seeing people who are really unhappy, for a real reason. It's not even well-written. Some punctuation notes: After a period, put two spaces before the next sentence. After a comma, a space before the next word. Learn them, use them, embrace them, invite them over for dinner. There is no such thing as two periods in a row; either use one period, or three periods and call them an ellipsis.

STYLE 0/10
It's the same-old same-old sad sad bad grammar poor spelling I have to read all the time as a reviewer.

DESIGN 5/10
Good lord. That is perhaps the ugliest person I've ever seen. That picture makes me want to run far far away. You have a scrollie down the side of your page even when you don't need it, so you ought to fix that. Sometimes you have a scrollie in your entry, too; no webpage should have more than one. All your links are close together at the top of the page, so i can dig it.

NAVIGATION 3/5
Your archive page is set up strangely, with the archives at the top and the current entries underneath. There is a reason people do it the other way; look into it.

FREQUENCY 3/5
I can't tell how much you've been updating recently, since your archives say that it's November of 2008.

posted by April at 11:38 p.m.
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