2003-07-06

6:13 p.m.


Catbreath

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CONTENT 30/70
Contentus Interruptus. Your titles and introductory paragraphs intrigued me, but the quality of your entries is short-lived and depth is absent. Basically, it's boring. You need to pick a topic and STICK TO IT. For example, you could make a whole entry about that guy who licked the frog. That's the kind of thing that people find interesting, not all the moshing and skanking that seems to take up the greater portion of your time on this planet. As for mechanics, PLEASE capitalize the word "I", check your spelling and don't make up words like "depressedish". There's something called a THESAURUS for that.

STYLE 4/10
This is a generous 4, mind you. Even though I cannot for the life of me understand why you would be attracted to a bug-eater, at least this guy is a common thread in your entries. That said, I must add that if Josh and Paul are the part of your diary by which your character and personality can be identified, maybe they should be the ones writing the entries.

DESIGN 5/10
I like the simplicity of your site. Not too many bells and whistles, but enough to make me click around to try to get a feel for who you are. The checkerboard border appealed to my 80s sensibilities. I suggest you change the picture that serves as your entry background. It is very distracting and makes your diary difficult to read. Plus, you can't even tell what the hell it's supposed to be unless you click on that image link you've got up.

NAVIGATION 5/5
Simple site, easy to navigate.

FREQUENCY 5/5
You update a lot. Your diary is fairly new, so we'll see if this continues. Quantity does not equal quality, however. You should work on taking the time to write less entries, but concentrate on putting forth a fine product.

posted by April at 6:13 p.m.
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