2003-10-14

11:09 a.m.


Liquid Mojo

Read This Diary

CONTENT 60/70
I see that you like really thorough reviews, so I guess you've come to the right place. First of all, I'm going to be blunt and tell you that I had some serious mixed opinions of your work... Content-wise, anyway. But that's not to say that your writing isn't involving or interesting, because I'd rate you a thousand times higher than I would the general Diaryland population. It's just that you're a mature author with some obviously mature content. At least you've taken the time to warn people about the general nature of your diary--you've got a soft-core porn side that is very visible. But that sex-drive of yours can work as a turn-off for some.

Now don't get me wrong--I like sex as much as the next girl (Did I just write that...?) But I've taken off ten points from your content score because I really think that you're worth a lot more than just that. You proved that with entries about your sister's birthday and little children, your love and hate for diary reviews, and your missing dog. Everything else seemed as though it was an intermittant, off the rack porn scene. Getting raunchy and describing your desires in your diary is fine, but I think you could put it in perspective. Everybody has fantasies and fetishes, you know... But I think you could produce more than the ADIDAS (All Day I Dream About Sex) diary.

Grammatically speaking, I found some sparse errors here and there, but nothing to really get my panties in a twist. All of those errors seemed to melt away as you progressed though, which is a sign of an adaptable diarist.

STYLE 10/10
You're experimental, and I love that. Just about everything in this diary is original and contains your own little twist. I found a good balance of humor, thought, inquisition, and art as I browsed through your entries. Thanks for giving me something intriguing to read.

DESIGN 9/10
I know what you're thinking... "What the hell?! Only nine points?" But I have to protest the use of not one, but four vertical scroll bars in your diary... Things like that just drive me crazy. Really, what is the need behind four scroll bars? Maybe you can answer that one for me...

Otherwise, the general layout was very impressive. I was a little frazzled by the amount of things going on at once--too many stimuli, if you ask me. It's good work, but I was a little confused as to where to start. At first glance, I thought I was going to be reading the typical teenage "emo" diary (ick), which totally turned me off. But then once the images finished loading, I was pleased with what you've done. And those pictures of Chicago...? Great job with the portfolio.

NAVIGATION 4/5
I would've liked it a lot better if you hadn't lost your drop down menus. You made it a lot harder to figure out how to get around, especially on the right hand side of the page. If you insist on using so many scroll bars, please do me a favor and highlight them a different color. I couldn't tell how far down the bar was going, and which bar I was supposed to be clicking at all.

One last thing: Thanks so much for switching from a basic weblog format to a single page entry layout. It makes it a lot easier to read your entries and get a sense of their frequency. Speaking of which...

FREQUENCY 5/5
Deliciously dedicated. That's what I like to see.

posted by April at 11:09 a.m.
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